Dude, the only thing wrong with it is it needs a bit of an edit. A voice over would be useful to help tell the story after it's been edited. Obviously the story has been live, recorded and edited but if bits were cut you could use voice over to tell the story in a new way and cover the bits that were cut with voice over/links!
I know you did not cut the vid but there u go.
Here, I'll have a slightly heavy bit of a BMW that needs to go to the doc... Anyone who might fit it in a tank bag or or top box drop me a PM. It's currently holding the bike up but when it's replaced its ready
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